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Post by Kaylee B on Sat Apr 25, 2009 6:44 pm

Hi, everyone!

I'm sort of in the process of writing a song (normally I'm not exactly a "song writer", but had a few ideas and thought I'd try), and was just wondering if I could get some feedback. It's sort of inspired by Psalm 100 and a couple other Psalms. Smile Please bring to my attention whether I need to change something (I'm not exactly too fond of the first couple verses, in particular...). I'm also still trying to think of a name for it. Any suggestions will be greatly appreciated!

You've opened the door
When resistance forbade me to knock
You sought my heart
when it was lost
truly this is what you died for...

You've replaced
my sad songs with praise
you've made me want
to seek your name
you've rescued me
and given me
joy

(Bridge)
I never thought I'd see
the light that You have shown on me
but now I see
You're holding out Your hand
I clearly understand the love You have for me
Your grace, Your power has set me free

(Chorus)
Shout for joy, to the Lord
all the earth sing, all the earth sing
He's opened His gates
enter with praise
all the earth sing, all the earth sing

(Bridge 2)
Oh, Lord who saves me
I'll walk in your truth
teach me your ways
I'll always love you...

I never thought I'd see
the light that you have shown on me
but now I see...

(repeat Chorus)


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Re: New Song...

Post by @ubrey B. on Sat Apr 25, 2009 7:17 pm

Very Purty. Very Happy

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Post by Kaylee B on Sat Apr 25, 2009 7:25 pm

Razz Aww, thanks! I'm glad you like it. Smile
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Post by Clareesa on Sat Apr 25, 2009 8:58 pm

Great job! Very Happy

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Post by Sonia J. on Sat Apr 25, 2009 9:03 pm

ya, that's really good! Cool
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Post by Foster G on Sat Apr 25, 2009 11:58 pm

I didn't know you wrote songs Surprised lol cool
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Re: New Song...

Post by Guest on Sun Apr 26, 2009 10:38 am

guud jooob! lol
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Post by Crystal Rose C. on Sun Apr 26, 2009 3:10 pm

Yeah I really like it! And I dont know what you were thinking...The first verses are like the best part! Oh that the last verses are really good too!
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Re: New Song...

Post by Kaylee B on Sun Apr 26, 2009 5:05 pm

Aw, thanks guys! Very Happy
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Post by Abigail G. on Mon Apr 27, 2009 3:11 pm

Thats a really cool song. Good job!

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Post by Anna P on Mon Apr 27, 2009 4:06 pm

Well done Kaylee!! I like it!! Two thumbs up!!
Have you any music written for it yet?
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Re: New Song...

Post by Kaylee B on Mon Apr 27, 2009 5:01 pm

Thanks, Anna!
Yeah, I have *almost* completed the music for it. The bridge and the chorus are finished, but I'm working on the first verses. Smile
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Post by Guest on Thu Jun 04, 2009 1:30 pm

Thats pretty cool! I wrote a whole bunch of songs. They aren't that good though! LOL! I wrote them a long time ago!
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Post by Abigail G. on Thu Jun 04, 2009 6:51 pm

You should post some of them!

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Re: New Song...

Post by Kaylee B on Thu Jun 04, 2009 8:21 pm

Maddy wrote:Thats pretty cool! I wrote a whole bunch of songs. They aren't that good though! LOL! I wrote them a long time ago!

I'm sure they're great! I'd love to hear (or read, I guess...) some of them. Smile
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