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New Song...
by Kaylee B Sat Apr 25, 2009 6:44 pm
Hi, everyone!
I'm sort of in the process of writing a song (normally I'm not exactly a "song writer", but had a few ideas and thought I'd try), and was just wondering if I could get some feedback. It's sort of inspired by Psalm 100 and a couple other Psalms.
Please bring to my attention whether I need to change something (I'm not exactly too fond of the first couple verses, in particular...). I'm also still trying to think of a name for it. Any suggestions will be greatly appreciated!
You've opened the door
When resistance forbade me to knock
You sought my heart
when it was lost
truly this is what you died for...
You've replaced
my sad songs with praise
you've made me want
to seek your name
you've rescued me
and given me
joy
(Bridge)
I never thought I'd see
the light that You have shown on me
but now I see
You're holding out Your hand
I clearly understand the love You have for me
Your grace, Your power has set me free
(Chorus)
Shout for joy, to the Lord
all the earth sing, all the earth sing
He's opened His gates
enter with praise
all the earth sing, all the earth sing
(Bridge 2)
Oh, Lord who saves me
I'll walk in your truth
teach me your ways
I'll always love you...
I never thought I'd see
the light that you have shown on me
but now I see...
(repeat Chorus)
Kaylee
I'm sort of in the process of writing a song (normally I'm not exactly a "song writer", but had a few ideas and thought I'd try), and was just wondering if I could get some feedback. It's sort of inspired by Psalm 100 and a couple other Psalms.
Please bring to my attention whether I need to change something (I'm not exactly too fond of the first couple verses, in particular...). I'm also still trying to think of a name for it. Any suggestions will be greatly appreciated! You've opened the door
When resistance forbade me to knock
You sought my heart
when it was lost
truly this is what you died for...
You've replaced
my sad songs with praise
you've made me want
to seek your name
you've rescued me
and given me
joy
(Bridge)
I never thought I'd see
the light that You have shown on me
but now I see
You're holding out Your hand
I clearly understand the love You have for me
Your grace, Your power has set me free
(Chorus)
Shout for joy, to the Lord
all the earth sing, all the earth sing
He's opened His gates
enter with praise
all the earth sing, all the earth sing
(Bridge 2)
Oh, Lord who saves me
I'll walk in your truth
teach me your ways
I'll always love you...
I never thought I'd see
the light that you have shown on me
but now I see...
(repeat Chorus)
Kaylee 
Kaylee B-
Number of posts : 53
Age : 30
Location : Neverland! :D
Hobbies : Horseback riding, playing piano, eating... lol
Humor : Laugh and the whole world laughs with you... laugh hysterically, for no apparent reason, and the they'll leave you alone
Nickname : Kay
Status: : Awesome! (arrogant much?) lol jk
Favorite Scripture Verse? : A man’s heart plans his way, but the Lord directs his steps. (Psalm 16:9)
Registration date : 2009-04-17
@ubrey B.- Admin
- Number of posts : 478
Age : 30
Location : Where a battle never occured.
Hobbies : whatever hits me momentarity :)
Humor : I love poetry, long walks on the beach, and poking dead things with a stick :)
Nickname : Pooky
Favorite Scripture Verse? : Isaiah 6:8
Registration date : 2008-06-17 -
Aww, thanks! I'm glad you like it.
Kaylee B- Number of posts : 53
Age : 30
Location : Neverland! :D
Hobbies : Horseback riding, playing piano, eating... lol
Humor : Laugh and the whole world laughs with you... laugh hysterically, for no apparent reason, and the they'll leave you alone
Nickname : Kay
Status: : Awesome! (arrogant much?) lol jk
Favorite Scripture Verse? : A man’s heart plans his way, but the Lord directs his steps. (Psalm 16:9)
Registration date : 2009-04-17
Clareesa- Admin
- Number of posts : 961
Age : 30
Location : Wherever God puts me
Hobbies : Doing what God wants me to
Humor :
Nickname : Fred, Clari, Catch-light Clari, Reeces-Pieces, Kee-kee, Pretty Much Everything Else, Creesa, Punk(don't ask),
Status: :
Favorite Scripture Verse? : Psalm 62:5, 'Find rest, O my soul, in God alone; my hope comes from him.'
Registration date : 2008-06-16 -
Sonia J.- Number of posts : 705
Age : 28
Location : Washington
Hobbies : Public speaking, archery, hanging out w/ friends, cooking, sleeptalking(lol), reading, Acting, and tons more!
Humor : Ahh! There's an ant on the floor! Everybody RUN!!!...Wait a sec, I'm not afraid of those. Never mind.
Nickname : Sony, Sonia Bear, others that I don't care to mention....
Status: : Living life as it comes...
Favorite Scripture Verse? : At the moment Philippians 2:3
Registration date : 2008-07-29
lol cool
Foster G-
Number of posts : 284
Age : 28
Location : locked in an ivory tower far away...
Hobbies : Piano, cats, music, homeschool, and reading
Humor : Borrow money from a pessimist - they don't expect it back!
Nickname : I don't need one, foster's different enough
Status: : still checking this site, but not posting much..lol
(sorry, I am still here...haha)
Favorite Scripture Verse? : Joshua 1:9 "Have I not commanded you? Be strong and of good courage; do not be afraid, nor be dismayed, for the LORD your God is with you wherever you go"
Registration date : 2008-10-31
Re: New Song...
by Crystal Rose C. Sun Apr 26, 2009 3:10 pm
Yeah I really like it! And I dont know what you were thinking...The first verses are like the best part! Oh that the last verses are really good too!
Crystal Rose C.- Number of posts : 569
Age : 29
Location : Right where God put me! On earth! Can you say that? "E-A-R-T-H"
Hobbies : singing! thats like all I do all day! Oh and I ride my bike....oh and I sing too! HAHA!
Humor : Why did the chicken jump on a BQ? ....He wanted fried chicken!
Nickname : "Hey you!"
"Tom Boy!"
"Coco-lakie"
Status: : Filling out my status on teens4god! DUH! HAHA!
Favorite Scripture Verse? : Prob 31
The whole thing!
Registration date : 2008-07-02 -
Kaylee B- Number of posts : 53
Age : 30
Location : Neverland! :D
Hobbies : Horseback riding, playing piano, eating... lol
Humor : Laugh and the whole world laughs with you... laugh hysterically, for no apparent reason, and the they'll leave you alone
Nickname : Kay
Status: : Awesome! (arrogant much?) lol jk
Favorite Scripture Verse? : A man’s heart plans his way, but the Lord directs his steps. (Psalm 16:9)
Registration date : 2009-04-17
Abigail G.- Number of posts : 468
Age : 31
Location : In the land of weird.
Hobbies : E-mail, songwriting, guitar, making cards
Humor : Small sign I saw posted on a street light pole: 'MEET LOCAL SINGLES!!! Easy: stand near others, turn off your cell phone.'
Nickname : Abigaily, Person, Abicus
Status: : I hate bugs.
Favorite Scripture Verse? : Psalm 52:9 "I will thank you forever, for you have done it. I will wait for your name, for it is good, in the presence of the godly."
Registration date : 2008-07-10
Re: New Song...
by Anna P Mon Apr 27, 2009 4:06 pm
Well done Kaylee!! I like it!! Two thumbs up!! 
Have you any music written for it yet?
Have you any music written for it yet?
Anna P- Number of posts : 160
Age : 31
Location : You don't want to know....
Hobbies : Reading. Listening to music and doing laundry.
Humor : Studies clearly indicate that those who get 'Get Well' cards sooner and more often have a 80% faster recovery rate, so I want to wish you a Happy Birthday
Nickname : Silence should never under any circumstances be construed as agreement. A lot of the time, it's simply a reflection that someone just said something so stupid that no response could possibly do it justice. - Ramblin' Dave
Favorite Scripture Verse? : At the moment, James 1:19-20 and Romans 5:8
Registration date : 2008-07-01 -
Re: New Song...
by Kaylee B Mon Apr 27, 2009 5:01 pm
Thanks, Anna!
Yeah, I have *almost* completed the music for it. The bridge and the chorus are finished, but I'm working on the first verses.
Yeah, I have *almost* completed the music for it. The bridge and the chorus are finished, but I'm working on the first verses.
Kaylee B- Number of posts : 53
Age : 30
Location : Neverland! :D
Hobbies : Horseback riding, playing piano, eating... lol
Humor : Laugh and the whole world laughs with you... laugh hysterically, for no apparent reason, and the they'll leave you alone
Nickname : Kay
Status: : Awesome! (arrogant much?) lol jk
Favorite Scripture Verse? : A man’s heart plans his way, but the Lord directs his steps. (Psalm 16:9)
Registration date : 2009-04-17
Re: New Song...
by Guest Thu Jun 04, 2009 1:30 pm
Thats pretty cool! I wrote a whole bunch of songs. They aren't that good though! LOL! I wrote them a long time ago!
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Abigail G.- Number of posts : 468
Age : 31
Location : In the land of weird.
Hobbies : E-mail, songwriting, guitar, making cards
Humor : Small sign I saw posted on a street light pole: 'MEET LOCAL SINGLES!!! Easy: stand near others, turn off your cell phone.'
Nickname : Abigaily, Person, Abicus
Status: : I hate bugs.
Favorite Scripture Verse? : Psalm 52:9 "I will thank you forever, for you have done it. I will wait for your name, for it is good, in the presence of the godly."
Registration date : 2008-07-10
Re: New Song...
by Kaylee B Thu Jun 04, 2009 8:21 pm
Maddy wrote:Thats pretty cool! I wrote a whole bunch of songs. They aren't that good though! LOL! I wrote them a long time ago!
I'm sure they're great! I'd love to hear (or read, I guess...) some of them.
Kaylee B- Number of posts : 53
Age : 30
Location : Neverland! :D
Hobbies : Horseback riding, playing piano, eating... lol
Humor : Laugh and the whole world laughs with you... laugh hysterically, for no apparent reason, and the they'll leave you alone
Nickname : Kay
Status: : Awesome! (arrogant much?) lol jk
Favorite Scripture Verse? : A man’s heart plans his way, but the Lord directs his steps. (Psalm 16:9)
Registration date : 2009-04-17
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